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Nocturnal Malice

The waves lap gently in the fading light,
They are streaked softly by the sleeping crescent
Whilst the stars echo the silence of the night.

Cautiously the seabirds shuffle out of sight,
And as they sorrowfully whisper "repent, repent!"
The waves lap gently in the fading light.

Watery hills glide with the grace of flight;
Elegantly they rise and evanesce with dignified intent,
Whilst the stars echo the silence of the night.

Smudged clouds roll delicately with purposeful might -
Soon they shall smother all without consent;
The waves lap gently in the fading light.

Against the serenity wet winds begin to fight;
Under a muffled glow the tamed stallions suffer torment,
Whilst the stars echo the silence of the night.

Swiftly the crags grow in spite,
Their anger builds; their anger must vent!
The waves roar brutally in the ebon light,
Whilst the darkness echoes the wrath of the night.

14/07/09
©2009 ~Cur1ous
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Author's Comments

I attempted a villanelle for the first time last night and it was awful, but I had another go today and this is what I came up with. It's not brilliant I know, but it was interesting to try.

I broke away from the villanelle pattern in the last two lines as I thought it was necessary, but I've tried not to make drastic changes.

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:icondriftinghigh:
MAKE DRASTIC CHANGES!
It's what makes poetry fun ;)
But yes, this is a lot better than the one I read last night, i'm proud :';)

--
Wise men talk because they have something to say; fools, because they have to say something.
Plato

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